VCNYC outreach email

Outreach email · Cold Email

Sender identified only as VCNYC

Four sentences from a broker: news hook, one-line who-I-am, a no-pressure offer of event space, shared mission. The recipient called it the best she'd received.

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Type: Outreach email
Format: Cold Email
Source: lynxcollective.substack.com

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From: Arash Sadighi, Tue, Sep 26

Hi Dorothy,

We haven't met, but both my Twitter and LinkedIn are buzzing with your announcement for Lynx Collective and we have some mutual connections so I figured it was worth dropping you a line.

I run a commercial real estate brokerage called VCNYC and many of our clients have extra space that sits underutilized and some even have event space (like THIS) that they let us use when needed.

Down the line if your Circles are ever in need of physical space to get together for fireside chats, networking, or workshops, please feel free to drop me a line.

Lynx sounds like it will be a great tool and resource for founders and our mission at VCNYC is to help founders in the NYC tech and small business ecosystem so we'd love to help to the extent we can.

Congrats on the launch!

Best,

Arash

The move

Arash Sadighi writes to Dorothy about her Lynx Collective announcement. He runs a commercial real estate brokerage called VCNYC whose clients have extra space and "some even have event space", links "THIS" to an example, and offers space for "fireside chats, networking, or workshops" if her Circles need it. It closes with "Congrats on the launch!".

Why it works

Our read"We haven't met" is stated up front, which spares her guessing and reads as honest.

Our readThe offer names her Circles and what they might do in the space, so it is tied to her launch rather than generic.

Our readA linked example of the event space lets her see the offer without having to reply first.

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